為什么我要寫(xiě)一篇關(guān)于PS的文章

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今天無(wú)意之中

翻到了曾經(jīng)申請(qǐng)大學(xué)時(shí)的PS

臥槽

那叫一個(gè)矯情

那叫一個(gè)絞盡腦汁班門(mén)弄斧

洋洋灑灑一千多字

沒(méi)看到一半

我整個(gè)人已實(shí)力懵逼

所以

現(xiàn)在想想看，特么的我當(dāng)初到底是怎么被錄取上的

無(wú)限心疼審閱我PS的admission老師

不說(shuō)了，跪一個(gè)先!!!

帶你們感受一下，我和我曾經(jīng)找過(guò)的中介合作下的妖孽畫(huà)風(fēng)。這是第一段。

Creativity， tenacity，inspiration ，and passion are the four pillars of my life ,which ,I suppose, will be the very ones leading to my success. With passion so prevailing ,I preserve in it ;With passion so overwhelming,I fight for it .As our great leader Chairman Mao put it and I paraphrased it ,on the way where your passion takes you , if you fail ,you’ve got to try again and prepare yourself in any way possible and strive for the ultimate triumph. This is how I try to live the best life I can no matter how life baffles and frustrates me.

臥槽，讀完之后，我尷尬癌晚期了好嘛!!!

真特么覺(jué)得自己是智障

我這特么都寫(xiě)了些什么當(dāng)年就這么遞交上去了

完全不知所云，刻意遣詞造句，boring級(jí)別max，

寶寶心里苦啊，寶寶尬點(diǎn)被戳穿了，寶寶受不了這尬點(diǎn)喚醒的身體內(nèi)的洪荒之力，

寶寶憋不住了，寶寶一定要說(shuō)了!!!

第一段一共也就四句話，還特么全部是廢話。

創(chuàng)意韌性靈感激情是我人生的四大支柱

因?yàn)閮?nèi)心的激情滿的要溢出來(lái)了，所以我堅(jiān)持并奮斗著

不忍直視的是，我還動(dòng)用了我們的毛爺爺(先跪一個(gè))!!!

關(guān)鍵是，這翻譯水平，我也是完全想不起來(lái)是引用的毛爺爺哪句經(jīng)典語(yǔ)錄了!!!

最后以一句‘不管人生遇到怎樣的挫折，我就是秉承這樣的信念在努力過(guò)好這一生’結(jié)束第一段。

臥槽，翻譯成中文之后我更想抽死我自己了。

這么多廢話，特么關(guān)你申請(qǐng)這所學(xué)校這個(gè)課程有半毛錢(qián)關(guān)系?

好吧，其實(shí)愛(ài)說(shuō)廢話的也不僅僅只有曾經(jīng)年幼無(wú)知的小編一人，你們大多也有這個(gè)通病。

華威大學(xué)admission老師口中最忌諱的PS模板

之前機(jī)緣巧合碰到過(guò)華威大學(xué)的一個(gè)admission老師，然后就聊到了中國(guó)學(xué)生申請(qǐng)中的個(gè)人陳述PS這一環(huán)，聊到這里的時(shí)候老師的聲調(diào)明顯比之前高了，呵呵，眉毛都翹了一翹。

他說(shuō)，‘我不知道其他學(xué)校是不是這樣，我們?nèi)A威大學(xué)貌似收到的來(lái)自中國(guó)申請(qǐng)者的PS 都很大程度上呈現(xiàn)出模式化的問(wèn)題’。

總結(jié)下來(lái)，基本是這樣。

第一段，介紹自己小時(shí)候的生長(zhǎng)環(huán)境是怎么樣的，我爸爸媽媽做的是什么工作，對(duì)我有啥幫助(學(xué)校內(nèi)心OS：你小時(shí)候哪兒長(zhǎng)大的，爸媽干啥的跟我們學(xué)校有啥關(guān)系?)

第二段，我在學(xué)校的成績(jī)有多好多好，學(xué)過(guò)哪些課程(學(xué)校OS：你成績(jī)?cè)趺礃?，學(xué)了哪些課，我們?cè)谀氵f交的成績(jī)單上度能看到吶，你應(yīng)該跟我們說(shuō)你學(xué)的東西以及你擅長(zhǎng)的科目跟你今后的研究方向或者說(shuō)未來(lái)想要學(xué)的課程和你未來(lái)規(guī)劃的方向有什么關(guān)聯(lián)?有哪些助力?又有哪些gap?)

PS：這個(gè)Gap指的就是你目前的知識(shí)跟你未來(lái)想學(xué)的東西之間還有哪些問(wèn)題，或者很難解決的問(wèn)題，或者之前從沒(méi)想過(guò)的問(wèn)題存在?比如，我現(xiàn)在學(xué)的是物流，我想要學(xué)酒店管理，那么怎么樣在物流和酒店管理之間找到聯(lián)系?比如酒店新鮮事物的冷鏈運(yùn)輸，或者是客房物品的采購(gòu)著一些?

第三段， 我在學(xué)校參加過(guò)XXX社團(tuán)，XXX活動(dòng)(學(xué)校OS：跟你將來(lái)想來(lái)我們學(xué)校以及學(xué)的東西有啥關(guān)聯(lián)?)

第四段， 我好好好愛(ài)英國(guó)，也好愛(ài)好愛(ài)你們學(xué)校(學(xué)校OS：……我們知道你們愛(ài)我們很愛(ài)英國(guó)……你跟人家也是那么說(shuō)的吧……)

當(dāng)時(shí)聊完的時(shí)候，也是實(shí)力尷尬，因?yàn)槲矣浀迷谖襊S的最后一段，就是寫(xiě)得我多么多么愛(ài)英國(guó)，多么多么想去你們學(xué)校!!!

呵呵呵呵呵呵呵呵

從外網(wǎng)扒了兩篇Examples of Successful Statements，你們感受下。

Statement #1

My interest in science dates back to my years in high school, where I excelled in physics, chemistry, and math. When I was a senior, I took a first-year calculus course at a local college (such anadvanced-level class was not available in high school) and earned an A. It seemed only logical that I pursue a career in electrical engineering.

When I began my undergraduate career, I had the opportunity to be exposed to the full range of engineering courses, all of which tended to reinforce and solidify my intense interest in engineering. I'vealso had the opportunity to study a number of subjects in the humanities andthey have been both enjoyable and enlightening, providing me with a new anddifferent perspective on the world in which we live.

In the realm of engineering, I have developed a special interest in the field of laser technology and have evenbeen taking a graduate course in quantum electronics. Among the 25 or sostudents in the course, I am the sole undergraduate. Another particular interest of mine is electromagnetics, and last summer, when I was a technical assistant at a world-famous local lab, I learned about its many practical applications, especially in relation to microstrip and antenna design.Management at this lab was sufficiently impressed with my work to ask that Ireturn when I graduate. Of course, my plans following completion of my current studies are to move directly into graduate work toward my master's in science.After I earn my master's degree, I intend to start work on my Ph.D. inelectrical engineering. Later I would like to work in the area of research anddevelopment for private industry. It is in R & D that I believe I can makethe greatest contribution, utilizing my theoretical background and creativityas a scientist.

I am highly aware of the superb reputation of your school, and my conversations with several of your alumni have served to deepen my interest in attending. I know that, in addition to your excellent faculty, your computer facilities are among the best in the state. I hope you will give me the privilege of continuing my studies at your fine institution.

全文一共四段，一共368個(gè)字

第一段講我會(huì)選擇電氣工程的簡(jiǎn)單粗暴的邏輯關(guān)系，一個(gè)是因?yàn)榕d趣，一個(gè)是因?yàn)樯瞄L(zhǎng)。

第二段寫(xiě)興趣和實(shí)力的加深，其實(shí)一步一步都是在講，我為什么會(huì)選擇這個(gè)領(lǐng)域這個(gè)項(xiàng)目。

第三段指出了自己想要研究的方向，以及為此，我現(xiàn)在所作出的努力，學(xué)業(yè)和職業(yè)規(guī)劃。

最后一段，為什么我會(huì)選擇你們學(xué)校和你們的項(xiàng)目。一環(huán)扣一環(huán)，條理清晰，表達(dá)順暢，將自己的故事用最樸實(shí)的文字寫(xiě)出來(lái)，有自夸，但恰到好處，不矯情，也沒(méi)煽情。

Statement #2

Having majored in literary studies (world literature) as an undergraduate, I would now like to concentrate on English andAmerican literature.

I am especially interested in nineteenth-century literature, women's literature, Anglo-Saxon poetry, and folk lore and folk literature. My personal literary projects have involved some combination of these subjects. For the oral section of my comprehensive exams,I specialized in nineteenth century novels by and about women. The relationship between "high" and folk literature became the subject for my honors essay, which examined Toni Morrison's use of classical, biblical, African, andAfro-American folk tradition in her novel. I plan to work further on this essay, treating Morrison's other novels and perhaps preparing a paper suitable for publication.

In my studies toward a doctoral degree, I hope to examine more closely the relationship between high and folk literature.My junior year and private studies of Anglo-Saxon language and literature havecaused me to consider the question of where the divisions between folklore,folk literature, and high literature lie. Should I attend your school, I wouldlike to resume my studies of Anglo-Saxon poetry, with special attention to itsfolk elements.

Writing poetry also figures prominently in my academic and professional goals. I have just begun submitting to the smaller journals with some success and am gradually building a working manuscript for acollection. The dominant theme of this collection relies on poems that draw from classical, biblical, and folk traditions, as well as everyday experience,in order to celebrate the process of giving and taking life, whether literal or figurative. My poetry draws from and influences my academic studies. Much of what I read and study finds a place in my creative work as subject. At the sametime, I study the art of literature by taking part in the creative process,experimenting with the tools used by other authors in the past.

In terms of a career, I see myself teaching literature, writing criticism, and going into editing or publishing poetry.Doctoral studies would be valuable to me in several ways. First, your teachingassistant ship program would provide me with the practical teaching experienceI am eager to acquire. Further, earning a Ph.D. in English and Americanliterature would advance my other two career goals by adding to my skills, bothcritical and creative, in working with language. Ultimately, however, I see the Ph.D. as an end in itself, as well as a professional stepping stone; I enjoy studying literature for its own sake and would like to continue my studies on the level demanded by the Ph.D. program.

全文5段，429個(gè)字，也是沒(méi)超過(guò)500

第一段相對(duì)更為簡(jiǎn)單粗暴，我就是想申請(qǐng)英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言和美國(guó)文化。

第二段為什么想申請(qǐng)這個(gè)專(zhuān)業(yè)，因?yàn)槲腋信d趣，然后用具體的實(shí)例闡述清楚自己感興趣的點(diǎn)。第三段明確想要研究的方向。

第四段講為什么會(huì)選擇這個(gè)研究方向，和我學(xué)業(yè)職業(yè)規(guī)劃的關(guān)聯(lián)，以及我現(xiàn)在正在做的。

第五段講職業(yè)規(guī)劃及為什么要申請(qǐng)這個(gè)博士項(xiàng)目。

也是句句都在點(diǎn)子上，圍繞著‘為什么我會(huì)選擇這個(gè)項(xiàng)目’，沒(méi)寫(xiě)半句廢話。

牛津大學(xué)的個(gè)人陳述要求也很明確，PS的核心應(yīng)該是為什么你覺(jué)得這個(gè)課程適合你，而不是寫(xiě)你的個(gè)人成就，和無(wú)關(guān)的一些興趣和抱負(fù)：

申請(qǐng)這個(gè)課程的原因

實(shí)例證明你想研究這個(gè)領(lǐng)域的動(dòng)機(jī)以及你對(duì)這個(gè)領(lǐng)域的理解

提出合理論證的能力

除了最基本的入學(xué)要求，你還能為這個(gè)項(xiàng)目做什么貢獻(xiàn)(也就是為什么我們要選擇你)

是否具有抗強(qiáng)壓學(xué)習(xí)工作的能力

推理能力

和快速汲取抽象新概念的能力

KCL的官網(wǎng)直接限制了 PS數(shù)字，500字左右，為什么你要選擇讀這個(gè)碩士項(xiàng)目，讀完之后的規(guī)劃和你與這個(gè)課程相關(guān)的經(jīng)歷經(jīng)驗(yàn)。

關(guān)于PS字?jǐn)?shù)，真心覺(jué)得500字封頂了，特別是申請(qǐng)高峰期的時(shí)候，你覺(jué)得他們會(huì)有耐心

一個(gè)字一個(gè)字的讀完?

呵呵呵呵呵

最后，

一定不要說(shuō)廢話，

一定不要為了寫(xiě)長(zhǎng)句而寫(xiě)長(zhǎng)句，

一定不要為了煽情而煽情，

就簡(jiǎn)簡(jiǎn)單單陳述自己的故事就好~~~

能打動(dòng)人的，永遠(yuǎn)是真實(shí)的故事，而不是浮夸的文字。